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1、【考研1號(hào)】《寫作160篇》——第一本考研英語(yǔ)話題寫作連續(xù)6年命中作文原題2011年考研英語(yǔ)寫作在線修改練習(xí)及點(diǎn)評(píng)Asweseefromthecartoonabove,thereexisttwodifferentaspectsoffishingnamelyitisabriefhistoryofcommercialfishingThefirstpictureshowsthatfishwanderinginthewaterandthereisonlyfewboatworkingonfishinginthelakeTherearenumer

2、ousfishinthewaterabovewhichaboatwasoccupiedwithfishingthatwhatmuchbiggerinsizewhen1900.Bythecontrast,thesecondpictureindicatesthatin1996therearenumerousboatsfishingonthewaterinwhichithardlytoseeafewfishwhosesizewasbiggerthanformer.Accordingtothephenomena,Wecanconcludeth

3、atfish’snumberdecreasingbecausemoreandmorefishingactivesheldbypeoplethatgainbenefitsfromfishingasworldpeople’sfishconsuminglargerandlarger.Moreover,fishing’sfruitisreducingmaythankstotheworld’senvironmentchangingcausedbypeople’sbehavior,whichgavethewaterwherefishliveont

4、henegativeeffectthatkillmajorityfishorhamperthefishingproducingtoinfluencethefishingecologysystem.Sowhatwecando,itisthehightimewemadelegislativesforprotectingfishingdevelopingandcontrollingpeople’sbehavior.Havingrecognizedthattheimportanceofprotectingfishsourceandpaying

5、attentiontoconsumeeconomically,Thefishinwaterwouldn’tgetlessorextinct.【第一段點(diǎn)評(píng)修改】①Asweseefromthecartoonabove（above作為副詞，修飾動(dòng)詞時(shí)可以放在動(dòng)詞之后，比如說(shuō)thequestionmentionedabove；作為介詞，具體用法是abovethesea；但是作為形容詞，修飾名詞時(shí)，需要放在名詞之前）,thereexist（因?yàn)樵摱卧诿枥L漫畫內(nèi)容時(shí)有時(shí)間定位，所以要注意整段的動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)為過(guò)去式并保持一致）twodifferenta

6、spectsoffishing（namely引導(dǎo)了該句的分句，所以在這里應(yīng)加逗號(hào)將兩個(gè)句子隔開）namelyitisabriefhistoryofcommercialfishing②Thefirstpictureshowsthatfishwandering（這里表示魚在水中漫游的狀態(tài)，wandering前面缺少系動(dòng)詞be）inthewaterandthereis（動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題，few修飾可數(shù)名詞，所以這里系動(dòng)詞要用were）onlyfewboat（使用復(fù)數(shù)）workingonfishingin（漁船在湖面作業(yè)應(yīng)使用介詞on，in表示在

7、湖里）thelake③Therearenumerousfishinthewaterabove（問(wèn)題同①句）which（這里which引導(dǎo)的從句并不是在修飾前文內(nèi)容，而同樣是漫畫中的景象，應(yīng)與前文為并列關(guān)系，所以應(yīng)使用表并列的連接詞，如and，atthesametime等）aboatwasoccupiedwithfishingthatwhatmuchbiggerinsizewhen1900.（that從句和when引導(dǎo)的從句缺少謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，從句部分表意不清）④Bythecontrast,thesecondpictureindicates（

8、動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題）thatin1996thereare（動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題）numerousboatsfishingonthewaterin更多精華請(qǐng)登陸考研1號(hào)網(wǎng)www.ky007.com【考研1號(hào)】《寫作160篇》——第一本考